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ORANGE Crush

Crush

OMG!
That girl’s for me!
Hair so fine;
eyes sublime;
keep my eyes
movin’
groovin’
down that body—
oh my goddy—
she’s a hotty!

Feels so good,
     you want your first crush
to last…

Gotta walk up to her;
gotta talk up to her.
Dude, don’t slumber—
get her number.
Get my feet to
move in,
groove in.
I ain’t shady,
be my lady—
come on, baby.

I’ve got my spine,
     I’ve got my

Yeah, you’re mine;
mine, all mine.
This will last forever,
we will be together
in my place you’ll
move in,
groove in.
Give to me your body;
you will be my lady;
I’m lovin’ you baby.

…you want your first crush
     to last,
don’t let it go
    so fast…

Why you sippin’ soda
with another dude?
Can’t you feel
my heartbeat
heart     beat
heart
beat
to a pulp.
Bruised fruit
not my fault
bitch.

Follow me,
     don’t follow me.

…don’t let it go
    so fast…

I set out to write “Crush” about infatuation, about fantasy love gone wrong. Refrains referencing early 1970’s advertisements for Orange Crush™ soda give the poem a feeling of innocence; whereas, inserting references to the REM song “Orange Crush”, a song about the American involvement in the Vietnam conflict, insured that the fantasy went bad quick.

So bad that the speaker ends the final stanza with the “B” word.

The obvious question here is, should a Christian poet/writer use profanity in their writing? Scripture is clear that we should be careful of the words that come out of our mouth, but a lot of that refers to the heart intent of those words. People can say very hurtful things using nice, family friendly words.

It is rare that I employ what are referred to in polite circles as “cuss” words, vulgar language, profanity. In this case, I felt the word in the context of the earlier innocence of the narrative hits the reader in the face. It shows that abuse, relational violence can come out of nowhere. My friend, Elizabeth, a Lutheran pastor and poet told me, “the word ‘bitch’ just kinda came out of the blue for me.”

And I think that may be how it is in abusive relationships. I don’t believe any woman starts a relationship to be abused. (And though men can be abused by women, it’s predominantly the other way.)

So the use of the “B” word in this instance is not to be vulgar or gratuitous, but to slightly shock the reader into a sympathetic understanding of abuse.

Copyright © 2016 Scott Daniel Massey

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